Monday, February 13, 2012

Valentine's Day Contest

Today is the last day to enter Susanna Hill's Valentine's Day Contest. I believe it ends a 5pm so I'm cutting my entry pretty close.  I wrote a short children's story for ages 8+ (it's kind of sad, but I hope it still qualifies)









Catch and Release

Stanley went fishing everyday after his wife Betsy died.

He would daydream on the lake.

He wondered how much fun Betsy was having.

Was she country dancing again?

Baking cookies?

Painting pretty flowers?

He remembered when Betsy was truly happy her right eye would twitch. He giggled at the thought.

Even though Betsy was gone he always felt her close by and in his heart.

Then one eerie day, out on the lake, a sharp tug on his rod almost pulled Stanley into the water. He caught the biggest catfish in years. He held her tight as she squirmed. Strangely, it looked at Stanley and twitched its right eye.

“Besty” his mouth went dry.

“Is that you baby?” He almost dropped her.

He brought her home and filled the bathtub with water.

He made a bed on the bathroom floor but couldn’t sleep that night.

“I'll never let you go, now that we’re together again,” He whispered.

Soon Betsy stopped moving.

The vet told him she probably was homesick.

She is home, Thought Stanley.

So, the next day he released her back into the lake and never fished there again.

That’s because he knew there was more fish in sea.

The End

Thanks for stopping by!! Now remember to check out all the other contest entries at: http://susannahill.blogspot.com/2012/02/valentines-day-contest.html#comment-437749638

39 comments:

  1. Excellent entry, Jenny! So glad you managed to enter in time to join the fun! Poor Stanley. I hope he finds another fish in the sea :)

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    1. Thank you Susanna. What a fun contest you're throwing - as usually. Thanks for having it and dropping by :)

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  2. I'd call is touching rather than sad. I love your last line.

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    1. Thank you Kirsten, glad you enjoyed it

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  3. I agree very touching. I loved the "Is that you baby" line. :)

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    1. Thank you for the compliments Stacy :)

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  4. Loved your fishy Valentines tale. On a scale (a fish scale, of course) I give you a ten :•)

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    1. Aw, a 10?? Really, thanks so much Penny. Love the puns

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    1. I'm know, I feel bad too :/ I should have turned him into a fish or something lol

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  6. It is touching...and sweet! I often prod my kids into bringing Valentines to some of our elderly neighbors who are alone. The simplest little card or flower can mean so much!

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    1. That would mean a lot to someone. Thanks for your kind words Cathy

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  7. This is adorable and a reminder that we need to let go and let live.

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    1. Thank you so much! I'm glad for your visit :)

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  8. Stanley! Poor Stanley! Yes, you should have turned him into a fish so I wouldn't be depressed now! Haha. Thanks for the unique story, Jennifer! :)

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    1. Oh, that's not good Renee, didn't mean to make it that sober. Thanks for visiting, glad you thought it was unique :)

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    2. Haha, Jennifer, no, it's not that sober...I'm just a weeper, so it doesn't take much! What can I say? I'm a pile of mush. :)

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  9. So cute! Kind of made me giggle. Love the whole "other fish in the sea" type of thing. So perfect! You rock girl!

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    1. Thank you for those kind words Leigh. Glad you stopped by!!

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  10. Beautiful and a bit melancholy. I hope Stanley did find another "fish" eventually!

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    1. Thank you Heather, so nice of you to visit :)

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  11. I think we need to find an illustrator in our 12 x 12 group to sketch up Stanley in a boat, looking into the eyes of giant catfish with a talking-bubble "Is that you baby?" I would love to see it! A guy that can talk like that to a fish is certainly going to find someone!

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    1. Haha, I would love to see that sketched out. Thanks for the laugh Eric

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  12. Very moving, but I'll have to admit funny at the end. You caught me off guard. Great entry Jennifer.

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    1. Thank you Pat, I'm so glad you thought it had a funny ending. That's what I was really going for. :)

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  13. Thanks Jennifer, for sharing such a bitter-sweet story. :)
    I loved that he threw her back so she would "live"...and smiled at the last line...good for him...life does go on!!

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    1. You're welcome, glad you enjoyed it Vivian

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  14. Oooh, something different, I like it! Great job, Jennifer!

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  15. Awww...this was such a touching story. Poor Stanley! I loved the ending though.

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    1. I'm so glad you did. Thanks for your visit

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  16. Thats a good one. Its an emotionally strong one as well.

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  17. I was also caught off guard! Good luck in the contest!

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  18. I didn't see the fish bit coming. Very clever story! Well done.

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    1. Thanks for the kind words Hannah :)

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